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The pie charts illustrate how many degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the 1990, 2000, and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate how many degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate how many degrees
granted
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 in different fields at the National University in
the
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1990, 2000, and 2010. There is a three pie chart by each year and
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an announcment
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announcment
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announcement
 of scholarships. It
is
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clealry
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clearly
 show that computer science degrees each year
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 in comparison to the other
programms
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programmes
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. And a noticeable decline in the faculty of business.
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 business faculty gradually decreases in degrees granted from 30% in 1990 to 15% in 2010.
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, computer science sharply increased in 1990-2000s,
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 slightly went up in 2010.
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, medicine grants virtually no changes at all except
enchanging
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 in 2000 with over the quarter (30%) and
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subsequent
 subsidence to twenty-five
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cent.
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law
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 had
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 similar effect
to
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 medicine but
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. Law grants were about modest fifteen per cent,
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 cut down to
mere
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 10%,
after
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this
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 again expand in
2010
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the 2010
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 year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • degree
  • field of study
  • granted
  • National University
  • decade
  • trend
  • popularity
  • dominant
  • least popular
  • analysis
  • technological advances
  • economic changes
  • gender distribution
  • correlation
  • job market
  • prediction
  • future trends
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