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Some people believe the benefits of tourism outweigh the problems or creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Whilst a majority amount of individuals claim that the growth of
tourism
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 can be seen as a benefit,
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 its humongous advantages, including the fact that resorts bring in money, I believe that it does have an explicit negative impact on the environment and
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excessively increasing prices. Different aspects of
tourism
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 will be explicitly discussed in
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 both beneficial and cause problems. On the
one
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 hand, it is noticeable that
tourism
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 brings in money,
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,
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 economy improves and local citizens are provided with a larger number of employment opportunities.
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, every year, local students who are
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 searching for job offers, find the opportunity to work in different sorts of resorts that offer them the necessary facilities and a reasonable salary. Another benefit worth noting is the development and improvement the infrastructure faces.
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, more facilities for tourists are being built in order to be more suitable and entertaining for
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visitors.
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modernized the transportation system and in
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 it helps
local
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 population to go from
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 place to another.
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, it is important to acknowledge the dreadful drawbacks that
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 possesses. First and foremost, it drastically increases the prices of houses making it difficult to find affordable houses.
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, in the most visited European cities,
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 as Barcelona, it is very challenging for local students to find
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affordable accommodation near their university, as it is very expensive to pay for the rent in
this
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 city.
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, they have to search for houses in the nearest suburbs. On top of that,
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 significant drawback is the damage
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 the environment.
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 clear example might be the overdeveloping of several beautiful and outstanding areas that gradually destroys the history and culture of the place. In conclusion,
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 of
tourism
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 are seen very clearly as it is commercially good for an area, but it must be fine with care
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 unless it becomes damaging.
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, I strongly believe
tourism
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 is largely beneficial only if it is done with controls.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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