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4.Some people think that news and media are affecting our life in a positive way while others disagree. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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With the social media explosion, people get news and any sort of media easily.
This
 is
also
 accompanied by lots of fake news and requires more judgement to differentiate them. Getting information too simple leads to the argument of whether it is giving positive or negative impacts on our life. In my opinion, I will say that news and media are affecting our life in a good way. I believe that these data are neutral
whereas
 it depends on our method and attitude in processing it. The more info we obtain helps
us
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we
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 to understand what event is happening globally even if we didn’t leave our homes.
Moreover
,
this
 helps to broaden our views and had a different perspective. For example, when covid-19 first started off, the origin and its danger had already been widespread throughout the globe warning people to start their precautionary procedures.
Furthermore
, the challenges of judging which data are useful with which are fake will be a way of improving one’s speculative ability. In nowadays world, independent thinking is considered an important skill to acquire as we can’t just believe in anything that appears in front of us, we have to be alert and cautious. Obtaining these can help us to think about past and future possibilities which improve our future performance.
In other words
, we will not be misguided by those selfish press
while
 getting to train our thinking mindset. In conclusion, the effect press bought us can be constructive if we learn to convert it into personal training of our liberated thinking
while
 helping us to absorb much knowledge easily to have a better understanding towards non-identical topics.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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