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many people use distance-learning programs (study materials, the internet, and so on) to study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits of attending school, college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Distance-learning programs or online
classes
 are not new. It is widely believed that those types of study can not bring the same quality as
offline
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 way. In my view, I can not neither agree nor disagree with
this
 statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that
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internet
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 environment
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 certain limitation. One of the main reasons can be that
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 screens, people hard to connect
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other
 emotionally. Students might
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 difficulties in finding teamwork partners, they do not have a place to improve their communication skills with people either. Another reason can be that intention and motivation
while
 studying are weaker.
For example
, school basic rules
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builted
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built
 for
student
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 to discipline the student,
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 them from interrupting the
classes
. Some research articles show us that the working atmosphere is very important. If pupils
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have
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 to attend raw
classes
, they should. On the
orther
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 hand, I agree with the viewpoint that learning
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 technical tools
is
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 working right now.
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Firstly
, there are no impediments
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 distance or
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of
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 cultures. The fee one person
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 to pay for the online class may
cheaper
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, too.
For example
, if I want to join the course in
USA
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, I need to pay for tickets, rent house, transport, food... but if I do have online
classes
, everything
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 easier.
Secondly
,
distance
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laernig
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learning
 program is the best choice for busy people.
This
 is because these
classes
 do not require much time to transfer. With a laptop and wifi, we can study everywhere, so convenient. In
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conclusion
, every coin has two sides and I am convinced that both online
or
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 offline
classes
 can make it out. Each individual can find out
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 suitable way for their own.
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