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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Nowadays the number of cars in the street has created uncountable difficulty for societies. Meantime, average
people
 have calculated the cost
for
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 daily
commute
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.so, in my sight if they force by
the
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heavier money, it irrefutably has
impact
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 on their manner towards
carriage
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. At the same time, other ways should be done
due to
 widely variate kinds of reasons for the traffic. There are many reasons why in my perspective the idea is essentially effective.
Firstly
, it is generally admitted that public transformations are one of the best paths that would change the traffic issue. Meanwhile,
while
people
 find their personal vehicle accessible in terms of price, it seems complicated to convince them
for
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other choice
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.
For instance
, trains and buses are beneficial for either the environment or folk if the price of gas goes higher.
Secondly
, regardless of the sort of situation
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that
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 having a personal car might be necessary, the public
are
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 going to be logically cautious about the time to drive in case of emergency. To illustrate what I meant, earlier, families have tended to hang out aimlessly in
street
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, indeed, it makes them excited as
much
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as other entertainment.
Accordingly
, having a walk
instead
 of that would alternatively be a choice
instead
 of extra money. There is another solution that might be determinative for those who still can adjust the price and run personal
vehicle
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. First and foremost, it is not deniable how the measure of wellness in public transport is significant,
in particular
 for
people
 who don’t have financial
matter
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. As an example, in
Dubai
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 part of trains have better equipment that
accordingly
 is expensive but a good option for
this
 kind of citizen.
On the other hand
, in my area cars have divided by their number that case of limitation some days they do not let be out and if be, they will
punish
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 by the police.
Such
 as separating by odd and even days. In brief, higher prices could decrease
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traffic to a great extent because for more
people
 it goes irrational to spend.
However
 other solutions for others who are capable of paying more money are important too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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