at the present time, the population of some countries includes a reletively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, the population of young people is more than the elder people in some countries. There are several advantages and disadvantages
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the number of young adults grows in different countries there will be a lot of educated and hard-working generation in
workplacesm
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workplaces
workplace
.
Although
, they do not have
such
experience that the elder specialist
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they are much younger. They are not only passionate but
also
they do not
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in the payment because they are in the stage of gaining experience and investing in themselves. But, when elders become close to their retirement
the
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companies have a big concern about new employment and
that is
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a person who doesn’t have any work experience as long as they can keep their specialist
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major
manager
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Besides
, elder groups are very
costful
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costly
for governments.
Although
, they pay taxes in their
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as they become older they need more medication services.
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, tablets, private
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,
wheelchair
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and so on.
In addition
, they need more attention and transportation options have to be provided for all aged members. Because
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they can not easily walk in steeps or use taxi and bus. So, they make a lot of financial
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for
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In contrast
, adults can make a huge development in industries and companies globally. In conclusion, the population of
younger
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generation has
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in
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with
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olders
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older
. It is a time to give an opportunity to adults to improve and be thankful
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elders. I think that phenomenon
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it happen and has more advantages than disadvantages in many cases.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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