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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#friends #absence #friendship
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It is often argued that blood relation is more important than any other relations,
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 if
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 has a good family, it can substantiate the absence of having
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.
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 I agree that having a good family is a blessing, I don’t think a good friendship is replaceable. Family is the only thing a
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 can have from the very beginning of life. There is unrequited love even before the
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 was born which makes it so precious and unbreakable with the blood-relation. If
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 has a good family at the back, I think that
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 has a head start on
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’s life journey. Even if that
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 wouldn’t have any
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, can still have a shoulder to cry on or someone to celebrate success with,
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 family members can
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 be
friends
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. On the other side, even though
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 can be intimate with his/her family, there would be some stuff that the
person
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 would not prefer to share with them.
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, especially teenagers wonder about sexuality, alcohol, and love life
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 most of them do not rather talk about these topics with their families.
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, non of the relationships are perfect including blood relations,
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 sooner or later,
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 would need a friend to talk about family issues. People can need an outer approach to some subjects like
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.
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,
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 are bounded by groundless love, people can not pick their families but can pick their
friends
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. To summarize, I don’t believe that even a good family can not provide everything which a friend could. In conclusion, I believe having a good family is a blessing and be
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’s inherent
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 but a good friendship is irreplaceable as the presence of the subjects
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 would not be comfortable talking with a family member.
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