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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that blood relation is more important than any other relations,
thus
 if
one
 has a good family, it can substantiate the absence of having
friends
.
Although
 I agree that having a good family is a blessing, I don’t think a good friendship is replaceable. Family is the only thing a
person
 can have from the very beginning of life. There is unrequited love even before the
one
 was born which makes it so precious and unbreakable with the blood-relation. If
one
 has a good family at the back, I think that
person
 has a head start on
one
’s life journey. Even if that
person
 wouldn’t have any
friends
, can still have a shoulder to cry on or someone to celebrate success with,
thus
 family members can
also
 be
friends
. On the other side, even though
one
 can be intimate with his/her family, there would be some stuff that the
person
 would not prefer to share with them.
For instance
, especially teenagers wonder about sexuality, alcohol, and love life
which
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 most of them do not rather talk about these topics with their families.
Furthermore
, non of the relationships are perfect including blood relations,
therefore
 sooner or later,
one
 would need a friend to talk about family issues. People can need an outer approach to some subjects like
this
.
Besides
,
friends
 are bounded by groundless love, people can not pick their families but can pick their
friends
. To summarize, I don’t believe that even a good family can not provide everything which a friend could. In conclusion, I believe having a good family is a blessing and be
one
’s inherent
friends
 but a good friendship is irreplaceable as the presence of the subjects
one
 would not be comfortable talking with a family member.
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