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the graph shows the amount of spent on books in germany, france, italy and austria between 1995 and 2005

the graph shows the amount of spent on books in germany, france, italy and austria between 1995 and 2005
The graph shows the expenditure on
books
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 in
Grermany
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Germany
,
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France
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france
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France
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, Italy and Austria between 1995
and2005
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and 2005
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 it can be seen that
Germany
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 spent a lot of money on
books
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, it is always the highest of 4
country
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countries
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.
Ccnstract
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Contract
 Austria is the lowest from 1995 to 2001, after that it
have
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has
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 changed. Looking at the figure
of
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for
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Germany
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 it
is
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apply
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always
stand
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stands
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in
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at
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top
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the top
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one
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apply
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on
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of
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 the graph. Between 1995
ang
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and
 1999,
money
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the money
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 spent on
books
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of
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in
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Germany
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incread
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increased
10
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by 10
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 % us dollars
million
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. After 4 years, in 2003, the number of money spent on
books
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 in
Germany
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have
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apply
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decreaded
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decreased
about
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to about
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 5
million
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 but from 2003 to 2005 it have reach a peak
of
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in
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graph
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the graph
a graph
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to account
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accounting
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 for mỏe 95
million
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.
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, the number of
autria
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Austria
 started at 30
million
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,
it
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which
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 is the lowest in 4
country
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countries
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, after which in 2001 it experienced a rise to 50
million
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 in 2003, before ending the period at about 70
millions
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million
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 in 2005 and higher than Italy. The number of
france
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France
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change
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changes
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countinue
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continued
, it increased from about 55
milllion
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million
 to 75
million
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. France
only
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is only
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 lower than
Germany
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, germany, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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