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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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They say that technology will never stop advancing. Nowadays,
individual
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have
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 the
freewill
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 to start over and migrate to other countries for a career given the
improvement
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communication
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in communication
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 and modes of
trasnsportation
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transportation
. Remote jobs are becoming famous,
transportation
are
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 now cheaper, and more
infrustructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
 are
built
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 to solve commuting problems,
however
,
due to
 these upgrades, human interaction
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are lessen
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 and untoward vehicular accidents are
in
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 the rise.
Hence
, there are more benefits as opposed to disbenefits of the development of communication and transport. On the one hand,
due to
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better internet speed and
proliferation
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the proliferation
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 of online jobs, more and more people are on the verge of choosing
working
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to work
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 remotely in
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their
 own places.
In addition
, even in
copaniees
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companies
 online seminars and
meeting
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 are being held
in
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on
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 digital platforms
such
 as
zoom
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, google meet, and
facebook
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Facebook
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 messenger. All of these applications provide a clear way of talking to someone or in a large group provided a
qualit
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quality
 internet connection.
Morover
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Moreover
, working abroad is now more
accecible
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accessible
 with the improvement of airlines around the globe. To illustrate, a company person can be deployed anywhere around the globe if need be.
Finally
, better facilities are built, to cite as examples are
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 terminals, railways with bullet train capabilities, and bus
centers
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are
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being
utelized
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utilized
utilised
 in today's period. Technological advancement,
in
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on
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 the other hand,
have
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 drawbacks that people do not seemingly realize.
On
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 of which is the decline in human interactions where more people tend to use online channels to bring about and talk
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about thier
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thier
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their
 concerns.
In addition
, even big concerts and church activities are being held live
in
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 social media and streaming sites like youtube.
Furthermore
,
due to
 the updates and
transportation
 availability a rise in accidents
are
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 seen
wether
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in
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 sea, air, and land. A research group
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 Harvard
university
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 studied the trend of vehicular accidents and proved that the increase
of
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 means of
transportation
 is one of the reasons for untoward incidents. In conclusion, technology will provide a better means of communication and
transportation
while
 it has
also
risk
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 that are proven, cosequently, individuals must be aware of the rising concerns.
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