the top priority of business is making money , and they do not need to have social responsibilities . To wwhat eextent do you agree or disagree ?

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corporation
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was creating
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and they make sure that their social
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unnecessary
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. Personally ,
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definitely disagree with the sentence . The reason which
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will explain and show in the paragraph below. On the one hand , personal
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, it really
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in every
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such
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uneffectively
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ineffective
if work without good
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or
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kind
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.
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can not grow up
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at all , because
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employer
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employers
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do not have any soft
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or kind of
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that can help in
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jobs.
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that , making
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way was unreal ,
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from many
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of things ,
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philanthropic action or
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for some
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unemployed
. It is evident that working without social
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can
making
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the way
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harder if
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business
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do
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not have a strengthen-steps , it can not grow the
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it will be
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that
business
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need to carry . In social life , having
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good
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will receive
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respect
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, it does not matter if
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the
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of workers , because everyone
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to change to suit in
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than the stepback.
On the other hand
, there are a host of compelling reasons as to why
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am convinced that making profits or
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production can be easier which can attract the employee passing the factory emission
was
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the perks .
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who
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public
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and soft
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to
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work perfectly can achieve the perks easy than
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others.In fact, the production process
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can help the firm escape from the
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of making
money
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are
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taking their
attraction
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on
money
too much , they will not think about the
important
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of social
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and the
business
will go down until the tops can
regconize
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recognize
.
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really hard to take that the workers do not know how to behave with their
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customers
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, it can say that they do not know how to solve
the
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problems. In conclusion ,
while
it is irrefutable that making
money
without
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responsibilities
is the worst way to do ,
i
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would
content
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that doing any
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or anything which
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the
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social skills ,
it
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really
need
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a lot of soft skills and social
responsibilities
instead
of do not know face to face with the problems as well .
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