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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005
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The line graph provides
the
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data about the consumption of
money
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 on books in European
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country
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countries
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 from 1995 and 2005
Overall
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 it can be seen that Germany was the highest
rate
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 of
amount
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 of spending
money
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 on books from 1995 to 2005.
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, there was the lowest
rate
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is
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in
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 Italy in 2005. Turning to the figure
further
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 detail, Germany was the
country
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 which reach a peak of the four
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country
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 after it increased rapidly until 1999. In the next
year
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, it decreased slightly and reached more than 82 dollar-millions. From 2001 to 2005, Germany accounted for 95 dollar-millions. In the following
year
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, there was France which is the second
country
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. Between 1995 and 2001, France rose quickly
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 55 to approximately 70 dollar-millions. In the
last
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year
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, France increased slightly and reached 75 amount of
money
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. Remaining to the detail,
although
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 Austria stood at the lowest
rate
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, it increased regularly from 1995 to 1999. Austria
remain
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 unchanged
in
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 two years. But in the next
year
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, it jumped dramatically and reached more than 60 proportion of
money
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 in 2005. The final, Italy was
the
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higher than Austria but
in
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contrast
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 it was the lowest
rate
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in
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four
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 countries in 2005. Italy just remained stable between 1005 and 1999 and boosted slowly until 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, country, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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