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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world?

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It is undeniable that a significant increase has been observed in
tourism
 which has become a main income source for many locations in the globe.
However
, unless it is managed well, a number of difficulties can come to create Paris
tourism
 has some advantages and disadvantages. One of the main benefits is economic growth. The more tourists come, the more money they spend which results in strengthening the economic power of a nation.
Besides
this
, people, who visit abroad as tourists, broaden their horizons after knowing other's cultures and traditions,
Moreover
, thanks to
tourism
, one cannot only relax and enjoy but
also
 make more friends if they meet others
while
 visiting tourist places.
Hence
, these are some pros owing to
tourism
. Paradoxically, the natural beauty of tourist places
such
 as hills and oceans is being destroyed since visitors do not care to keep them clean. As being carefree, they throw things like plastic and paper there that harm the beauty,
Additionally
, the growth in
tourism
 increases and the traffic congestion worsens, simultaneously. Visitors use personal vehicles to visit tourist places leading to more traffic on roads.
For example
, a Sample Survey Office shows a report that 50% of traffic problem is a cause by
tourism
 which creates hurdles for humans and the environment.
Therefore
,
tourism
 brings these negative consequences. In conclusion, after analysing both sides it can be stated that despite having positive points of
tourism
, it offers detrimental effects as every coin has both sides. If it carries advantages, disadvantages cannot be neglected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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