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Research into new medicines and treatments is essential. Should this research be paid for by private companies or by the government?

#research #medicines #treatments #companies #government
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the world discovered many strange diseases and very dangerous viruses, the
research
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 on drugs and treatment methods is very necessary. In my
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 new
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 and treatment methods need
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 funding The world is currently experiencing epidemics, new viruses and very complex diseases. The
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 needs to pay for healthcare and
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. It is necessary to break the habit of paying heavily
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 festivals and events.
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, pay heavily in the health
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, because if the
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 does not pay, the health
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 will be very poor. A real-life example shows that in 2019 the covid-19 epidemic broke out. The medical facilities do not have enough equipment to meet the overload, resulting in many
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 not surviving.
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 is one of the prime examples of not paying into the medical field The
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 is the place for the
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 to take refuge. Because
people
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 really need the help of the
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. Individuals or companies may still pay for treatments and
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.
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,
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 will have to pay very high prices for treatment. If so, the poor and the lower class will not be treated. So only the
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 can protect all the
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. Without the
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 sponsoring vaccines for
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, the outbreak would probably have a very high death toll. After all, in my opinion, the
government
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 should pay for the health
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, if it is left to the private
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 to pay,
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 drug prices will increase. Since
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 the poor
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will not be treated and they will gradually die if infected.
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