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Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases crime and violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In the contemporary world,
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people
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's safety takes first priority, a school of thought holds that
guns
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, which are actually self-defence for many residents, should be banned utterly in daily life. From my perspective, I totally concur with
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 tendency, as it provides multiple benefits, especially in violence and crime rates,
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 some other methods to ensure
people
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's life and health. All of them will be clarified thoroughly through
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 essay.
Initially
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, it is undeniable that
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, when being used by crime elements, ranging from thieves, robbers, gangsters, murder and so on, become a bad thing, which put a higher risk in citizens whenever they leave their houses.
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, owning weapons as a defence method sometimes motivate peoples to choose violent ways when facing any issues.
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, accommodating
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 having troubles when
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's brains become impressively angry and unconscious can lead to regretful consequences, as many investigators have pointed out that
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 are inclined to solve problems
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 their emotions more than their minds.
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 several reasons for prohibiting bringing
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 everywhere in towns, there are many substituted methods to replace
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.
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, there should be more investment in security guards and safety management. Gaining
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's trust is often seen as a more effective and feasible way to protect human life.
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, raising
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's awareness through some propaganda classes and educating
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 in the right way might help to solve
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 issue. In conclusion, it will be dangerous for
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 and others to carry
guns
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 whenever hanging out.
This
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 tendency should be deleted utterly in everyone's opinion
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