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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The maps illustrate the design of a
sports
center
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 in a university in the present time and its anticipated development in the future.
Overall
, the university
sports
center
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 is going to be changed dramatically in its surrounding sections. The first outdoor courts to the east will be replaced with many different functional rooms and the second ones to the west will be converted into another
pool
. The outdoor courts to the right side of the map will be demolished and replaced with a
sports
 hall in the
center
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 and two dance studios to its right.
In addition
, a spacious changing
room
 will be constructed to the southeast.
Also
, a small cafe’ will be built next to the changing
room
 to the south.
Moreover
, there is a gym at the top of the main
pool
 which will be expanded in its size toward the east. Alongside the changes that are going to happen to the east side of the
sports
center
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, the west parts will be transformed into others. The second outdoor courts will be completely knocked down and a leisure
pool
 will be built in that area.
Furthermore
, a changing
room
 and a
sports
 shop, which are connected, will be constructed to its south. The general form of the central main building;
such
 as the main
pool
, the seating section, another changing
room
, and a reception will be the same without any changes.
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