The table shows how the UK unemployed spend their time last year

The table shows how the UK unemployed spend their time last year
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows how the UK unemployed spend their time last year
The given table gives information on how the unemployed spent their daily activities
last
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year in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, the most preferred activity to be done by women was spent much
time
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as housework and the men spent more
time
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on job hunting.
To begin
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with, in the morning more the women preferred to spend their
time
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housework.
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spent about 49
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percent
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working on it.
Then
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followed by the percentages of shopping which were 26
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percent
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as the second most preferred to did.
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, most the men
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were keen to do job hunting in the morning and
then
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spent their
time
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shopping, accounting for 22 per cent and 20 per cent.
In addition
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, the same percentages shown women most likely to do housework and shopping in the afternoon accounted for 21
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percent
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and 17
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percent
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per cent
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.
While
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men spent their
time
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on television and gardening which was 14
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percent
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and 13
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percent
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rather than other activities.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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