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The graph shows the amount of money spenton books in Germany,France,Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spenton books in Germany,France,Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The given line graph illustrates the expenditure on books in 4 countries from 1995 to 2005. Units are measured at
million
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dollars
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, it can be clearly seen that Germany had the highest spending on books over
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while
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 Austria dramatically rocketed in the final years . Other materials changed very slightly.
To begin
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, Germany’s spending started at 80
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, after which it experienced a rise to 90
million
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dollars
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 in 1999, after
that
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 it dropped to approximately 85
million
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dollars
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 in 2003, before ending
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 at about 95
million
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. Turning to Austria, its spending began at 30
million
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This
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 climbed gradually to 40
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 in 1999 before it
remainly
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remained
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 unchanged from 1999 to 2001.
Then
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, it steeply rocketed to over 70
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at the end
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 of
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. Meanwhile, Italian money spending was recorded at 50
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 in 1995. After that,
in
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 increased to nearly 55
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 in 1997 before it took again to starting point in 1999.
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, it showed a gradual increase to about 63
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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, France witnessed a
slightly
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 climb to about 75
million
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dollars
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 from the beginning to the end.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rocketed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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