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Films can have effect on the children’s education and teach them many things. some thing is a positive effect while others think it is a negative effect. what is your opinion?

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Film production has become a huge industry nowadays
furthermore
 it is considered one of the largest industries that help in raising the country's economy, despite it might have various effects on the audience ,especially the kids,
otherwise
 it remains a good source of learning if it's used in a proper way. Actually, many education systems use cinema as a teaching method for students recently as a main subject at the school
nevertheless
 sometimes that could be harmful to their skills or abilities and must be taught under the supervision of an adult neither the school nor the parents. Basically, There are many children who are interested in business, sports, gaming, trading, fashion and many other fields of life , watching these movies types that are related to their interests may impact positively their passion and teach them more new things about the field they love, absolutely the parents must encourage their kids for that. On the other side, movies might be harmful or teach violence or bullying or any other bad things,
for example
, if kids watch a film for an upper aged and not suitable for them,
this
 will be a really bad impact on them,
otherwise
 here comes the father's and mother's rules to monitor their sons and daughter and protect them from gaining bad habit or interests from the films. In my ,opinion watching films or tv shows has a good impact on the underaged unless it is used in a bad way or unsupervised by older people.
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