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In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

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Selecting a place to live in is a big decision to make. In
few
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a few
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 parts of the world, people consider that
house
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 ownership is far better than living
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in at
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at
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a
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 rented space.
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 perspective is taking a lead nowadays among people with their own reasons to
favor
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this
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 trend . I
also
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 deem that buying
own
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their own
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house
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transform
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transforms
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 their lives in
optimistic
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 way , which would be elaborated
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 with convincing facts relating to its root cause.
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 with, a major cause is home ownership gives a feeling of satisfaction to most
of
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individuals. When they hold
a
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property ownership, they do not have to pay rent to their landlords, which
save
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 their money and refers to
long term
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 investment.
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, In Australia,
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the masses
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 mortgage to buy
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house
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a house
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 and take bank loans, which even make them
to
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struggle more financially.
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, they still do it, only to enjoy their peace of mind.
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, they achieve financial stability, where they contribute more in monetary terms but for their own personal purchase, which lends them an air of respectability too. I personally support the abovementioned mindset as it has
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 of positive impacts. Out of all,
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the dominant
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 point is that it allows one to transform the place
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 their choice.
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, living somewhere as a tenant does not offer much freedom ,where one has to abide by rules and regulations that are set by landlords.
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, there is no need to seek permission from anyone.
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, following
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 process is not needed
which
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it
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 needs to be approved by
house
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 owners. In light of the aforementioned, people act
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 their needs. If
benefits
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the benefits
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 of buying own
house
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 are more, it is obvious that one would pick
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 rather than renting a
house
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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