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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 day and age, a lot of
people
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 opt for travelling or working for a short
time
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instead
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 of going directly to
study
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 college after high
school
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.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of both methods.
To begin
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 with, plenty of
people
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 believe that travel or
work
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 for a duration of
time
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 after finishing high
school
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 helps them improve life skills and broaden relationships. Spending
time
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 in real life will help a person learn lessons from reality
such
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 as discipline, self-discipline and how to face all difficulties without relying. If
students
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 choose to
work
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, they will learn from the real working environment.
For example
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, if a person makes mistakes at
work
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, they will have their salary deducted or reprimanded, which will directly affect their economy.
This
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 will make them more careful, and
then
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 mistakes will not be repeated.
In addition
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,
people
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 who choose to travel often meet a lot of new friends and
then
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 broaden their relationships. Having many friends will help learners become more confident, and improve their communication ability. Thereby, making it easier for them to seize opportunities in life.
However
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,
This
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 choice
also
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 exposes
people
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 to two main harms: the
lack
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 of qualifications and the difficulty to catch up with friends who take the
time
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 to go to
school
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 as soon as they graduate from high
school
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. Choosing to go to
work
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 and learn practical
knowledge
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 is good, but cannot completely replace professional
knowledge
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 taught from universities,
lack
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 of qualifications will make
students
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lack
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knowledge
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 leading to difficulty in development. In a
study
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 by a Dutch reporter in 2021, up to 60% of
people
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 who
work
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 are having problems because they do not have professional qualifications, leading to many difficulties.
On the other hand
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, during that
time
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 those who choose to go to
school
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 right after they graduate from high
school
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 have completed almost a third of the program. That leads to wives who choose to travel or go to
work
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. If they want to go back to
school
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, they will not keep up with their peers.
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,
people
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 who choose to go to
university
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 right after finishing high
school
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 will make the most of their
study
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time
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as well as
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 uninterrupted
study
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time
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. From there, they receive benefits
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 as opportunities to advance their
knowledge
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 and internships
while
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 they
study
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 in a
university
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 environment.
For instance
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, in Vietnam,
people
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 choose to
study
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 at a national
university
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 after learning specialised
knowledge
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 at
school
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. If
students
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 have good results, they will stay at the
school
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 as a lecturer.
Besides
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, the
school
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 will
also
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 introduce and support job search for its
students
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 after completing their graduation.
However
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, continuous learning for a long period of
time
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 will
also
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 lead to
students
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 lacking practical
knowledge
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 from society. Some
people
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 will be too dependent on
knowledge
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 from
school
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 and
lack
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 real-life experience, making it difficult to adapt to the real working environment. A special example is the fact that not all scholars graduate with the same major as they studied in college, and the rate of not getting a job after graduation is not a small number. In summary, after graduating from high
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, the choice of spending
time
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 travelling or working for a period of
time
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 or taking
time
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 to start studying
university
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 is
also
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 up to each person's choice,
However
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, each option will have its own advantages and disadvantages.
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