Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Environmental problems have an alarming increase in our world. Loss of biodiversity of
plants
and
animals
, climate change, air pollution and other issues stand before humanity. There are two
diffetent
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different
viewpoints in our population: some people think
this
cannot be changed,
while
others suppose actions can
taken
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to bring about a change. In
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I will show two different opinions and highlight my viewpoint.
Firstly
, human activity,
causing
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by
production
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the production
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of different products, exhausting
emission
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, air pollution etc, has a negative impact on the
environment
, including
plants
and
animals
.
Thus
, in order to stop the extinction of them we should make actions, which decrease our consumption of products, that pollute the
environment
. It means that after stopping aggressive factors on nature, biodiversity will
be return
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and the extinction of ecosystem components cease.
For instance
, fossil fuels
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a huge impact on the ocean, when happens leak into the ocean of it.
Then
the upper side of
water
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is covered by an unsolved oil membrane, which does not allow aqua
plants
and
animals
to
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. Decreasing
consumption
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of fossil fuels and using gas will solve
this
issue and stop
extinction
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the extinction
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of ocean inhabitants.
On the other hand
, interaction between living objects inside the ecosystem is extremely complicated, because
plants
and
animals
evolutionarily have adaptive mechanisms in order to adjust to changing environmental conditions.
Thus
, our targeting interfering
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natural
process
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could have
more
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negative impact on the
environment
.
To conclude
, either of these viewpoints
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a logical explanation.
However
, I suppose, that small steps are better than nothing, and we are able to save our
environment
bit by bit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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