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Some people think that climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think it provides more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The impact of
Climate
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 Change has sparked a controversial debate in recent years. It is argued by many people that these drastic
changes
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 in
weather
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conditions
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 are impacting global businesses negatively.
On the contrary
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, others advocate that it opens the door to new business
opportunities
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. I firmly opine with the latter stance and in the following paragraphs, I shall elaborate both sides of the argument and
thus
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 lead to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, several studies have demonstrated that changing
climate
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conditions
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 are adversely affecting mankind and entrepreneurs are
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 exception. Economically
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, several agricultural corporations and global distributors are facing the heat of an unstable
climate
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 which is not only affecting the import and export industry but
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, the cultivation and production of these goods.
For instance
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, in 2022,
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 the unexpected arrival of early monsoon in India, the wheat crops were damaged severely resulting in the ban on the export of Wheat grains and related products.
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, not only farmers lost their profits but
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 the exporters of it.
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, rising sea levels
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 melting glaciers have drastically impacted the marine industry. Many fisherman have lost their livelihood as the sea animals are either migrating or in some cases found dead
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 extreme marine
conditions
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.
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, it is concluded that sudden
weather
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changes
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 are negatively impacting many businesses.
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, the proponents of the latter argument including me, assert that
this
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 change in
climate
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 gives birth to inventions and
opportunities
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 for researchers and
also
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 society members. To exemplify, farmers can cultivate crops with the help of new scientific techniques. Greenhouse farming is one
such
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 example that enables farmers to cultivate crops without depending on the
weather
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. Another example is cloud seeding, which produces artificial rain in dry regions. These are a few examples
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 how climatic
changes
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 bring
opportunities
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 to research and develop new ideas to make living more sustainable and less dependent on
weather
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.
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, one can conclude that, undoubtedly,
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 extreme
weather
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conditions
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, many companies face losses,
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, these
changes
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 give
opportunities
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 to research and develop advanced methods in order to curb the dependency on
climate
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conditions
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.
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Task Response
Ensure the essay addresses all aspects of the prompt, including both views and your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a clear and logical structure throughout the essay. Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas.
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