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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph provides information on amount of
shops
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, which were closed and the new
shops
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 which were opened from the
year
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 2011 to the
year
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 2018 in one country.
Overall
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, in 2015 a low number of
shops
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 were closed and during
this
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period
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 the closures and openings of
shops
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 are moderately dropping. At the beginning of the
period
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, there were approximately 8500
shops
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 which were inaugurated
although
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, these numbers started to fall by 4000
shops
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 in 2012.
However
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, in the span of the next two years, it substantially grew to almost 6000 new
shops
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, despite growth by the end of the
period
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 which is 2018 it shrank to half of its number compared to the
year
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 2014.
Furthermore
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, in the first four years of the given
period
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, the Closure of
shops
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 was roughly ranging between 6000
shops
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 to 7300
shops
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.
Additionally
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, the numbers rapidly depleted between the years 2014 to 2015 when it reached a peak low of less than 1000
shops
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 and from 2015 onwards to the
year
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 2018 it reached the range of 5000
shops
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 to 5500
shops
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, year, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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