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The internet has transformed the way we live, but it has alos created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

#internet #alos
As people are
now days
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 so
depend
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in
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internet
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 which has two
side
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 good
as well as
 bad. There are so many problems. My suggestion to solve
this
problem
 is
describe
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 ablow.
Firstly
, the
internet
have
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 made life so easy in many ways
such
 as easy and fast.
Due to
 the
internet
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children face
problem
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problems
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 like health issues.
Thus
,
persent
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parents
 should set
limite
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limits
 for there
the
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kids to
use
 the
internet
.
Due to
 video game
the
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kids play
less
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fewer
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 outdoor games which affect
ther
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the
their
 body. There
are
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 even some side
effect
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effects
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for
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on
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 the environment
due to
internet
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. Before the
internet
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,internet
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 the kids
use
 to play outside
game
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games
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 which
helpful
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was helpful
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 to learn more and more about really about the nation.
Governmnet
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Government
 should
encourge
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encourage
young
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the young
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 to play games and should provide sports facilities.
However
, the countries should
advices
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advise
advises
 the citizen to
use
 eco-friendly goods and services.
Secondly
, there
so
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 many side effects of
internet
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such
 as harmful
for
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 the body
abd
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and
 health.
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The internets
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Internets
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Internet
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 have made
the
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people so far from each other.
For example
,
such
 as if a person is setting in
group
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then
 that
a the
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person
whould
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would
 spend time on
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the internet
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internet
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. There was
less
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fewer problems
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problem
 before
internet
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 come for the groups.
Thirdly
, there are
are
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suggestion
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suggestions
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such
 as by taking some
step
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steps
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such
 as there should be time fixed for using
internet
. The
Internet
 should
be
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use
 less.
Step
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 should be taken by even the government to solve
this
problem
.
To conclude
, the above information show solution and suggestion for the
problem
 create
due to
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internet
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  • isolation
  • accessibility
  • empowerment
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  • verification
  • credibility
  • regulation
  • legislation
  • collaboration
  • ethical
  • accountability
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