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The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in someland.

The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in someland.
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The table illustrates the information regarding how much leisure time individuals from different
age
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 groups spent yearly in Homeland.The data is calibrated in
hours
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.
Overall
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,citizens in the
age
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 group of 70+ spend the maximum
hours
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 watching videos
whereas
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 teenagers spend minimum
hours
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 in the cinema. At a fleeting glance, teenagers spend the maximum number of
hours
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 watching videos as compared to other
age
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 groups.The individuals belonging to 60 and 70+s spend similars
hours
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 in socialising with 4
people
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.
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,citizens in their 30s spend double the time socialising with 4
people
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 in comparison to
people
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 belonging to the 20s who spend 150
hours
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.
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,senior citizens do not prefer to spend any time doing group exercise and sports.They only spend 25
hours
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 socialising with 4
people
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.The teenagers spend the highest number of
hours
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 450
hours
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 on doing group exercise and sport
in contrast
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 to other
age
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 groups.
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, the public in the50s utilised 50
hours
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 for individual exercise.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, hours, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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