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Environmental issues such as climate change have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s situation, where the Earth’s
athmosphere
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atmosphere
 is declining rapidly every year, many
people
 believe that the authorities haven’t made maximum efforts to enforce the regulations against lawbreakers.
This
 piece aims to discuss whether it is solely the
government
’s responsibility or if there’re others who
also
 bear the responsibility of protecting our nature. The most reasonable
arguments
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 that
supports
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 the
people
 is
beacuse
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because
 the
government
 could make rules and policies to prevent environmental
destrucions
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destruction
destructions
. Other than that, not many
people
 understand
about
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environmental issues and the negative impacts of bad habits.
Finally
, citizens have high hopes for their
government
 to resolve society’s
problemS
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problems
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 because they pay their taxes and trust the
government
 to manage their money properly.
While
 it is true that the authorities play crucial roles in protecting the environment, it is
imposible
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impossible
 for them to supervise everyone and ensure proper
behavior
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.
Moreover
, citizens must understand and obey the law, as it is made by the rulers for the common good.
In addition
 to that, many
people
 fail to realize that engaging
unhealthy
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 lifestyles collectively will cause massive problems if it is done continuously. In conclusion, the writer agrees that the
government
 should
strenghten
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strengthen
the
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law enforcement against wrongdoers.
However
, relying solely on the
government
 is not the most effective approach.
Instead
, it is essential for society to change their lifestyles and
behaviors
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,
such
 as reducing air conditioning usage, switching to cleaner fuels and adopting new technology.
Additionally
, the
government
 should raise awareness among citizens about the detrimental impacts of global warming. When both
government
 and citizen
fulfill
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 their roles effectively, our nature will recover more quickly.
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