Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction

Nowdays

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, buying things

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online shops,

such

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as groceries, clothes and movie tickets, is becoming more popular. So, for

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many people now are talking about how to take advantage of online shopping, On another hand they are a huge group warning

for

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about

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the affecting of internet shopping.

Body · 1

According to

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my experience, its many advantages

such

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apply

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availability

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the availability

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part- time

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part-time

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jobs as a driver for the orders. And that

help

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me to save my salary.

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its

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save

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saves

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time when I am busy and

cant

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can't

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go away to buy what I need, and

its

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it is

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huge

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scale its

decrease

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decreases

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the traffic gum, because

single

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the single

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driver can

arrived

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many

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at many

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orders, and

its

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it's

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useful to compare

among

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apply

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products just from your mobile phone.

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Since, The

beginng

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beginning

of online shopping the crime of stealing

have

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been increasing, and

for

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this

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reason

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many

coustomers

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customers

can not

realie

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rely

on online services. And they are many methods for that

for example

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, the product is different and not seems the advertisement.

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, sometimes they will

stolen

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you and your order will not arrive you.

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Another disadvantage when

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online shopping

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the first option for us many projects like, mall, food plaza even

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apply

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small shops in your

nighberhood

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neighbourhood

will lose and

cant

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can't

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profit from their projects, and that will reduce the main job for people.

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And the worst thing for me,

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will reduce the social life form our society and decrease

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human communication.

Conclusion

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oneline

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online

shopping is very useful but it is

big

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mistake to make it the

fo=irst

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first

option in our life.

arch.altalhi

Jul 27, 2023

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

263 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Convenience
Time-saving
Variety
Availability
Discounts
Promotions
Price comparison tools
E-commerce
Brick-and-mortar stores
Job losses
Security
Privacy concerns
Data breaches
Fraud
Delivery
Shipping issues
Delayed shipments
Lost packages
Delivery fees
E-tailers

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