You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Nowdays

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, buying things

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online shops,

such

as groceries, clothes and movie tickets, is becoming more popular. So, for

this

many people now are talking about how to take advantage of online shopping, On another hand they are a huge group warning

for

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about

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the affecting of internet shopping.

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my experience, its many advantages

such

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availability

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the availability

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part- time

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part-time

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jobs as a driver for the orders. And that

help

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helps

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me to save my salary.

Also

its

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save

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saves

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time when I am busy and

cant

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can't

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go away to buy what I need, and

its

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it's

it is

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huge

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a huge

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scale its

decrease

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decreases

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the traffic gum, because

single

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the single

a single

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driver can

arrived

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arrive

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many

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at many

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orders, and

its

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it's

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useful to compare

among

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apply

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products just from your mobile phone. Since, The

beginng

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beginning

of online shopping the crime of stealing

have

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has

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been increasing, and

for

this

reason

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many

coustomers

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customers

can not

realie

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rely

on online services. And they are many methods for that

for example

, the product is different and not seems the advertisement.

Also

, sometimes they will

stolen

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you and your order will not arrive you. Another disadvantage when

the

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online shopping

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the first option for us many projects like, mall, food plaza even

the

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small shops in your

nighberhood

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neighbourhood

will lose and

cant

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can't

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profit from their projects, and that will reduce the main job for people. And the worst thing for me,

this

will reduce the social life form our society and decrease

the

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apply

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human communication. In conclusion,

the

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oneline

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online

shopping is very useful but it is

big

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a big

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mistake to make it the

fo=irst

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first

option in our life.

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6 paragraphs

263 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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Relevant & specific examples

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