You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

Nowdays
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, buying things
on
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online shops,
such
as groceries, clothes and movie tickets, is becoming more popular. So, for
this
many people now are talking about how to take advantage of online shopping, On another hand they are a huge group warning
for
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the affecting of internet shopping.
According to
my experience, its many advantages
such
as
,
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availability
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the availability
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of
part- time
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part-time
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jobs as a driver for the orders. And that
help
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me to save my salary.
Also
,
its
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it
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save
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my
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me
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time when I am busy and
cant
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can't
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go away to buy what I need, and
its
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on
huge
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a huge
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scale its
decrease
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decreases
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the traffic gum, because
single
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the single
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driver can
arrived
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many
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at many
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orders, and
its
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it's
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useful to compare
among
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apply
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products just from your mobile phone. Since, The
beginng
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beginning
of online shopping the crime of stealing
have
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been increasing, and
for
this
reason
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many
coustomers
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customers
can not
realie
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rely
on online services. And they are many methods for that
for example
, the product is different and not seems the advertisement.
Also
, sometimes they will
stolen
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you and your order will not arrive you. Another disadvantage when
the
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online shopping
be
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the first option for us many projects like, mall, food plaza even
the
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small shops in your
nighberhood
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neighbourhood
will lose and
cant
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can't
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profit from their projects, and that will reduce the main job for people. And the worst thing for me,
this
will reduce the social life form our society and decrease
the
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human communication. In conclusion,
the
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oneline
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online
shopping is very useful but it is
big
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a big
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mistake to make it the
fo=irst
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first
option in our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Time-saving
  • Variety
  • Availability
  • Discounts
  • Promotions
  • Price comparison tools
  • E-commerce
  • Brick-and-mortar stores
  • Job losses
  • Security
  • Privacy concerns
  • Data breaches
  • Fraud
  • Delivery
  • Shipping issues
  • Delayed shipments
  • Lost packages
  • Delivery fees
  • E-tailers
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