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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visits culture and tourist attractions. To what extent, do you agree or disagree

#people #visitors #locals #visits #culture #tourist #attractions
Tourism plays an imperative role when it comes to
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the
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culture with each other in today's world. It is believed by a few people that higher fees should be imposed by
government
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 for foreigners
while
 visiting some prominent places, whether historical or some other cultural tourist attractions.
Although
this
 approach is advantageous from the
country
's perspective, it has some repercussions as well. In my opinion, the fee difference should be more considerable. The primary reason
of
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 charging more fees from overseas visitors is that the residents have already paid the taxes to their
government
 which are being utilized for the maintenance of these monuments.
Additionally
, some extra
service
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services
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 are
also
 provided by the higher authorities to assist them.
For instance
, the entrance fee for
Taj
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 Mahal is Rs.500 for those who acquire language translators or tourist guides.
This
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only
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makes it easier for them to comprehend the history and value of these attractions
,
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 but
also
 depicts the
speacial
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special
 arrangements set
yo
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you
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 by the
government
.
On the other hand
, it can enormously impact the economy of a certain
country
 with decremental tourism as the tourists might not visit in the future or even give recommendations to others.
Therefore
,
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 reputation would be sabotaged.
Moreover
, it
is
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seemed unfair because they have already contributed enough
for
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 the economy during their visit. At Philippine
airport
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airports
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,
for example
, 1500 pesos are collected as a travel tax from every person. To summarize, I would like to reiterate that
while
 the money collected from tourism is for the betterment of a
country
, the
government
 should be mindful when making the decision about the rate of entrance fees.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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