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Many people believe that it is better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #group
Many individuals think that it is best to learn something in a
team
instead
 of individually. I totally agree with
this
 statement because learning in a group can
enhace
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enhance
learning
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the learning
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process
, and teach
people
 invaluable
skills
 and
cultures
.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I believe learning something in a
team
 is more effective than individually. The primary reason why I believe
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learning something in a
team
 is more efficient is can
boosts
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learning
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the learning
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process
. To illustrate,
people
 in the
team
 can practise with each
others
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other
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 what they learn.
For instance
,
people
 who learn
foreign
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a foreign
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 language in
team
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the team
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 can have
opportunity
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 to practise the
lagnauge
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language
 with each other.
Therefore
, learning in
group
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groups
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will speed up the learning
process
.
Moreover
,
learn
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 something in
team
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the team
a team
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 is more motivation, which
mean
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means
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 the members of a
team
 can encourage each
others
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other
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 to do their best.
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people
a new
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new skills
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skills
 is another reason why I believe learning in a
gorup
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group
more
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is more
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 effective.
This
 is because
people
 who learn in a
team
 can develop valuable
skills
, communication, teamwork,
leadership
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and leadership
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.
Therfore
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Therefore
, these
skills
 can help individuals in their personal and professional
live
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.
Furthermore
, learning something in
team
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the team
a team
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 can help
people
 to experience
a
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new
cultures
 and
customes
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customs
customers
.
This
 is because often members of a
team
 come from different backgrounds and
cultures
, which give individuals a better
change
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chance
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 to learn about
diverse
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the diverse
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 culture.
As a result
, learning something in a
gorup
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group
can bring
people
 together and reduce the cultural difference.
To sum up
, I strongly believe learning something in a
team
 is more efficient than individually because learning in a group can
boosts
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boost
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the
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learning
process
, and teach
people
 useful
skills
 and
cultures
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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