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Some people think that children should start primary school later in life, others say that they should start it before 7 . Discuss both views, giving your own opinion.

#people #children #school #life
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children
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 will explore more about
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we have 90 % of individuals who trend and looking for a good
school
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children
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 because they prefer their child to get a high education , many of family send their kids sometimes for vital reasons, the work of mother and father during the day makes kids less caring ,
that
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 which will make
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 awful impact on them , a good instance here is the
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will waste in front of screens of
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 or tablet,
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 there many child feeling boring and maybe they exposure to some of the
riks
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,So be in the
school
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perfect
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 solution here .
ON
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 the other hand, some people think that will affect
children
 to have more suffering and responsible for studying and how they will end the homework and spend more
time
to think
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 about it ,
additionally
 they will cant sit at home for a long
time
 with their parents .,
Moreover
 some students they
not
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 have any skills or they don know how they will connection with others they will face challenges to understand the study environment
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that causes frustration
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and an early
time
 the child
need
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 to collect the basic of life and do only friendship, In my ,
opinion
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 I suggest it should
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balance
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 , 2 years before the
school
 it will be useful for kids to do communication with peer and
that is
 the significant point to
children
 start learning and motivation ,
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