The charts show information on transport and vehicle use in Edmonton. In pie diagram very noticeable that under half of all people use car to their needs
The charts show information on transport and vehicle
use
in Edmonton. In pie
diagram very noticeable that under half of all Correct article usage
the pie
people
use
car
Add an article
the car
a car
to
their needs. And Change preposition
for
the
Correct article usage
apply
fifty five
per Add a hyphen
fifty-five
cent
of this
Correct determiner usage
these
people
using
Wrong verb form
use
the
Correct article usage
a
car
in the city commute
to work.
Fix the infinitive
to commute
Comparison
with Change preposition
In comparison
car
Light Rail Transit which use
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uses
above
Change preposition
by
one third
of all Add a hyphen
one-third
people
is second which civil
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civils
use
for prevail
their displacement. The less used transports are bus and taxi Change the verb form
prevailing
similarly
with 10 per cent
each.
Nevertheless
, Edmonton or another city pupil’s perennial transport is car
, if they had of course. They Add an article
a car
the car
use
car
every far places. Fix the agreement mistake
cars
For example
for business probably forty five
and Add a hyphen
forty-five
also
for taking children to school 40 per cents
off Fix the agreement mistake
cent
people
using their car
. For shopping only 15 per cent
, but amazing
is that when for leisure activities peoples Correct article usage
the amazing
also
use
car
as similar Add an article
the car
a car
as
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to
shoppings
per Fix the agreement mistake
shopping
cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, people, car, cent with synonyms.
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