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The map show the changes that took place in the bookstore before and after 2000.

The map show the changes that took place in the bookstore before and after 2000.
#show #changes #place #bookstore
The map
show
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shows
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 the changes that took place in the bookstore before and after 2000. The map of
nowdays
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nowadays
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bookstore
Fix the agreement mistake
bookstores
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 replaced all the books and focused on making the environment more comfortable to read and relax
..
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.
...
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Have a mini cafe to buy a great coffee that
make
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makes
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 the atmosphere more satisfying, a couple number of tables to take a break from reading.
Also
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,Also
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 the fiction genre was replaced with non-fiction, the books that took a small space in the middle of
2000's
Correct article usage
the 2000's
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 bookstore
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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luckely
Correct your spelling
luckily
 changed into
an equally divided stands
Correct the article-noun agreement
an equally divided stand
equally divided stands
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 in the north of
travel
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the travel
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 stand. Likely in 2000
of
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apply
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bookstores fiction was more popular in comparison with other
genre
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genres
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 and took about 40% of total space.For
the
Correct article usage
apply
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comfort nobody didn't even give
an
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apply
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attention, had a
lot
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oflot
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 empty space which can be used to make there more attractive.
Overall
 a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps
present
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presents
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 a development from just a place to buy a book into
satisfying
Correct article usage
a satisfying
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envitonment
Correct your spelling
environment
 to take
rest
Correct article usage
a rest
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • renovation
  • facilities
  • digitalization
  • footprint
  • inventory
  • customer service
  • browsing experience
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • modernization
  • space utilization
  • technology integration
  • customer preferences
  • retail trends
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