The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
The supplied pie charts illustrate the principal objectives of
people
divided below and upper 30 Use synonyms
years
old. In general, Use synonyms
it is clear that
the proportion of achievement at work plays a vital role in both groups.
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To begin
with, Linking Words
people
under 30, spend most of their consideration on achievement at work which comprises about 31%, in comparison with Use synonyms
people
over 30 who have 31% of their primary activities in Use synonyms
this
regard. Linking Words
In addition
, doing hobbies is the second priority in both groups Linking Words
of
under and over Change preposition
apply
the
30 Correct article usage
apply
years
old which is 22 and 24 per cent, respectively.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
although
having a good appearance (18%) is the third priority in the group Linking Words
of
under 30, financial security is the third primary objective of Change preposition
apply
people
who have over the 30 Use synonyms
years
old (20%). Use synonyms
furthermore
, even though, Linking Words
people
over Use synonyms
the
30 Correct article usage
apply
years
old tend to spend their time with their family, the other group like to go travelling (15%).Use synonyms
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