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One of the most widely debated issues nowadays is that in some countries using private transportation is prohibited in particular urban centres

One of the most widely debated issues nowadays is that in some countries using private transportation is prohibited
in particular
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 urban centres. Personally, I strongly believe that
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 kind of action ought to be taken in most cities, as it has plenty of benefits for both citizens and
environment
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the environment
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. On the one hand, forbidding the use of private vehicles in certain city areas definitely has numerous advantages for
environment
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the environment
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.
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, people can reduce the number of problems related to the pollution of
environment
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the environment
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 by simply stopping driving personal cars that emit gases and other pollutants.
For example
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, in Germany, individuals use public transportation to get to work or school
instead
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 of owning automobiles
that
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which
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affect
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affects
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on
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apply
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the surroundings.
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, there are a lot of posters and advertisements that aware visitors and
travelers
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travellers
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 not
to
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apply
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smoke in forests, and so on.
Tht
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That
 is why, the ambience there is very pure and neat.
On the other hand
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, it is rather complicated for people who have families and work around the clock. As far as I know, most parents needed personal automobiles to get their children to school or education centres safely, to be confident in their safety.
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, some employees who have plenty of duties,
such
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 as meetings and business around a town, would not be able to get somewhere they want on time, as
it
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isit
wasit
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 really time-consuming because of public
transports
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transport
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 which
have
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has
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 a certain schedule. In conclusion, I fully agree that
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 kind of measure should be followed in other cities, as it really benefits in protecting the
surrroundings
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surroundings
 and habitat there.

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