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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Just like food, water and light are human basic needs, free
health care
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healthcare
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services
 should be provided to both
rich
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the rich
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 and poor in every
sociaty
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society
. the manufacturing of new medical treatments and medication has become expensive, leaving the poor to suffer as they do not have the resources to enjoy the privilege of free health care. two years ago, covid-19 hit the world and
this
 required
scientist
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scientists
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 working day and night to manufacture a
vaccine
 in other to stop the
speard
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spread
 of the virus. I
also
 remembered watching the news and hearing the newscaster list large figures of people dying, the whole economy was
shutdown
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,
this
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 left the economy in a bad state.
Nevertheless
, counties had to
fine
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find
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 means of purchasing the
vaccine
 for their citizens. poor/underdeveloped countries who did not have the means to purchase
this
vaccine
 had to leave their citizen stranded. Soon, the world leaders realized they had to help other struggling countries by giving them the
vaccine
 free of charge. In no time the
vaccine
 reached every inch of the world and reduced the number of death.
this
 even clearly showed every country, economy, government, company, poor or rich could work together in other to improve
ther
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their
the
 health care of everyone disregarding one's gain and
consider
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 the importance
in
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of
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 the lives of people who are in dear need.
Although
 covid-19 has not been eradicated
but
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it has been managed.
to sum up
,
i
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I
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 believe new medical treatments and medical
services
 should be provided to the poor as it is to the rich.
i
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I
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 do not dispute the fact that
this
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these
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services
 may be expensive
nevertheless
,
this
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these
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services
 can be paid for through charities, grants and donations.
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