The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
The pie chart depicts information about the outcome of a survey in order to know about the aim of doing exercises by individuals between 20 and 50 years of
age
.
Overall
, the maximum percentile of both given aged people
finds pleasure
in achievement at work, whilst the minimum per centum of the masses over 30 age
group
bring happiness
by spending time with family.
After analysing it can be seen clearly that there is a difference of below a tenth in the proportion of the individuals under 30 age
group
who likes to do exercise as they have a hobby and for other factors bring them happiness
, the respective figures were above two-fifths and 14%. The proportion of young individuals who makes happy with having a good appearance is 18%, whereas
the per cent of people
of the same age
group
who find pleasure
in travelling decreased by 3%.
The pie chart further
collates that one-fifths of older people
bring happiness
to them in
doing financial security, Change preposition
apply
while
the percentile of same-aged people
find pleasure
in performing hobbies is just above a quarter. Furthermore
, the percentage of above
30 Correct pronoun usage
those above
age
group
masses feel pleasure
whenever they spend time with their families is 14%,however
the percentage of above 30 Add a comma
,however
age
people
bring happiness
Change preposition
to them
them
in attaining achievement at work Correct pronoun usage
apply
is
escalated by nearly a fifth.Unnecessary verb
apply
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