The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
These charts look at the different activities which have an influence on people's happiness among two categories: at the age
under
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and over thirty. The given illustrations reveal that some categories have slightly changed,
whereas
others have disappeared and
replaced
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completely.
According to
the data, the minor changes have been highlighted by topics "doing hobbies" and "achievement at work".
However
, A slight increase can be seen, namely, 2% and 1% respectively. On the other side, the option "having a good appearance", which has taken almost the fifth part of all amount of the group, has disappeared.
Furthermore
,
this
part has been replaced by "financial security" for the group of elder people.
Also
, the presented pie charts show that 15% of youths under 30 prefer travelling,
while
roughly equal part of another group choose to spend time with their families.
In addition
, it can be seen, that topic maned "other factors" has decreased by about 4%.
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