The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

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These charts look at the different activities which have an influence on people's happiness among two categories: at the age

under

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and over thirty. The given illustrations reveal that some categories have slightly changed,

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others have disappeared and

replaced

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completely.

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the data, the minor changes have been highlighted by topics "doing hobbies" and "achievement at work".

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, A slight increase can be seen, namely, 2% and 1% respectively. On the other side, the option "having a good appearance", which has taken almost the fifth part of all amount of the group, has disappeared.

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this

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part has been replaced by "financial security" for the group of elder people.

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, the presented pie charts show that 15% of youths under 30 prefer travelling,

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roughly equal part of another group choose to spend time with their families.

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, it can be seen, that topic maned "other factors" has decreased by about 4%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

155 words

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