The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from
The graph illustrates the changes in quantity and kind of staff food expended by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.
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, the biggest change in the food was fish and chips, the big drop in consumption. Linking Words
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, fish and chips were lootineating in the year 1975, but after that experienced a significant decline until approximating a0 time by 2000
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On the other hand
, Pizza and hamburgers increased significantly.
Pizza starts at about 7 times per year. Linking Words
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, Humbargers looked at about 10 fast food in 1975 and Linking Words
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