It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?Ar

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In the history of the earth, there have been many extinctions of animals. Based on
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fact, many people argue that
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is a natural phenomenon and humanity should not be concerned about it.
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indeed,
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is a typical feature of nature, I do not agree that the international community should let everything go too far.
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many scientists, especially evolution theorists, in the history of the earth, there have been six remarkable
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periods. The majority of them originated from natural phenomena,
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, about 260 million years ago, dinosaurs and other enormous reptiles got extinct because of the clash between the earth and an asteroid. It has become the most well-known
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period among scientists and the public. Another noticeable example is the Ordovician Mass
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, which happened about 200 years before the disappearance of dinosaurs. Many biologists indicate that
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climate was the main cause of
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. It is certain that
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many
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periods happened
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natural phenomena.
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,
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the scientific community, the world is experiencing the sixth period and unlike the previous,
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human activities. Human beings have impacted
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the global climate in a negative way through global warming, affecting the biological features of a great deal of animal species.
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, overhunting has had
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contribution to the
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of animal populations. It is undeniable that
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have been affecting the ecology in a concerning way. If there are no punctual and effective solutions, another period of mass
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will be clear.
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, humanity can receive detrimental effects
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what it has sowed. One of them is people can lose the sources that can maintain food security in many communities. A case in point is
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a dodo
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, which was extinct in the 17th century because of the overhunting of Europeans.
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plenty of historical accounts, its meat was delicious. That meant if
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was still
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international agriculture could have an alternative for chicken, duck and goose. Another possible consequence is
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could devastate biological balance.
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, thylacine, or Tasmanian tiger, was one of the main species in Australia until there were many campaigns killing them in the late 19th century and early 20th century, and it was declared extinct in 1936. One of the prey of
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marsupial species was
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, a flightless and huge bird.
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the thylacine
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, the population of
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bird increased and these animals started destroying crops.
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trend caused an issue for the Australian government, so it commenced the Emu War, a campaign of killing
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. The result of
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war was
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were defeated by birds. If the population of thylacine was retained, politicians would not have to get fed up and
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fail when handling emus. In conclusion, in the past, animal
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was a natural phenomenon.
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, at present, it is a human trend. If
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do not restrict their own activities, they could lose the alternatives for their agriculture and devastate biological balance.
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