A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Joyce, I met your mum on Friday and she told me all about your admission and

also

how you are finding it difficult to fit in.

Firstly

, I will like to congratulate you on your admission to Queen's College, which is one of the top schools in the country. Making new friends and fitting into a new environment can be a little challenging but I know you will be able to fit in properly in no time. You can start making friends with your classmates, especially individuals who sit beside you in class. I will

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recommend you join clubs that you are passionate about, in other to meet people who have similar interests as you. You can

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participate in activities like school competitions because I know how competitive you can be. One other option will be to volunteer in other school activities, so you can meet other students from different departments of the school. I wish you a wonderful academic section and I hope to hear from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully Kemzy

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

178 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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