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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centre and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#cars #transport #city #centre #bicycles
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Some
people
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 have proposed that the
use
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 of motor vehicles and public transport should be stopped in the cities
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people
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 should make
use
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 of
bicycles
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 alone.
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 essay completely agrees with
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 statement because it is eco-friendly and will result in
reduction
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a reduction
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 of road traffic
accidents
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. The
use
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 of
bicycles
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 as the only means of transportation within the city is environmentally friendly.
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 is because there will be no need for fossil fuels to drive
bicycles
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 and as
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 no greenhouse gases will be released into the atmosphere.
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, providing
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a solution
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 to the problem of global warming.
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, in 2022, a newspaper published that the major cause of air pollution in Lagos State is exhaust released into the environment from vehicles.
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 to the above, road
accidents
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 will reduce significantly when
people
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 move about cycling. The occurrence of reckless driving under the influence of excessive alcohol consumption will be abolished when
people
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 ride
bicycles
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.
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 will eventually result in
reduction
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a reduction
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 in physical injuries and deaths from these
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.
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
accidents
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 which occurred on our roads have been attributed to dangerous driving. In conclusion, motor vehicles and commercial transport services should be made illegal in city centres. I agree that
bicycles
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 alone should
be
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use
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 because it ensures a clean environment and will lead to
less
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 road mishaps.
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