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Writing task 1 The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a school library in 2001, and how it changed as a result of renovations in 2009.

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The map depicts how the design of the ground floor of the school library was transformed after being rebuilt over a period of 8 years ( 2001 - 2009 ).
Overall
, the library underwent considerable changes as a number of sections were constructed and some places were modified between 2001 and 2009. The location of the entrance and stairs which sited the south and the south east respectively and the librarian's desk were near them in 2001 did not change in 2009.
While
 self-help, history and fiction that were situated in the west and north, were rebuilt to reduce their size and all of them were moved to the place of self-help in 2001. History was converted into a new kitchen,economic and low. Where children's books stand, there used to be fiction. Newspapers and periodicals were replaced by films and DVDs.
Moreover
, tables were in the centre of the floor,
whereas
 they were expanded, the number of them declined in 2009. It is
also
 worth mentioning that computers were added between films and DVDs and the librarian's desk after renovation.
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