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Some people believe that newspapers are the best way to read the news. others, however, think that websites are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #newspapers #news #websites
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Since the world has changed rapidly nowadays, digital media has become gradually common use in
21st
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 century, meanwhile, proponents of
newspapers
 remain strongly supportive somehow, in
this
 essay, I will present
the
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both sides of the
arguments
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,
in addition
, put forward my perspective after discussion. On the one hand,
newspapers
 were undoubtedly the main access to approach
the
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up-to-date information before websites emerged, indeed,
newspapers
 have their own pros and cons, with their diverse topic, readers can easily acquire tons of abundant information through surfing
newspapers
, which is contributed to the comparison with online
news
,
newspapers
 editors are more able to express the ideas and facts confidently without the limited by the number of words, in terms of the demerits, papers consuming is literally contradicting the global trends dubbed the environmental issue,
moreover
, people might found it hard to get what type of information they need
due to
 the complicated order of distinguished topic. In the case of accessing the
news
 through the internet, it is crystal clear that
this
 is the majority option of people in
this
 timescale,
this
 includes the advantages of the easily accessible, load of breaking
news
 that can be received by people’s mobile devices at the first time, they don’t even have to read the
news
 individually,
instead
, editors helped them to boil things down already, which is lead to its disadvantage—media companies need to make a profit by the amount of view from the users, turns out editors are urged to yield the
news
 that can only draw people’s attention,
consequently
, invasion of private, salacious gossips of celebrity, these kinds of society issues has emerged. As I had analyzed both sides of the issue now, I still need to confess that I am more intend to utilize website resources as the primary way to consume
news
,
firstly
, I generally keep my mobile devices on me throughout the day,
hence
 I have no necessity to buy the
newspapers
 from the convenient stores,
secondly
, I am able to search the
news
 that draws my interest on the website straight forward, it’s more effective and avoid from time-consumed, with no doubt, it’s best of both world to me;
nevertheless
, If I have enough time on the weekend, playing the puzzles and reading the
news
 word-for-word can be a good choice once in the
while
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Credibility
  • Multimedia
  • Editorial oversight
  • Immediacy
  • Tangible
  • Reliability
  • Ritualistic
  • Interactive
  • Fact-checking
  • Niche reporting
  • In-depth analysis
  • Generational differences
  • Environmental sustainability
  • News consumption
  • Digital news platforms
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