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More students decided to take a part-time job when they go into universities. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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University
students
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 usually resolve to find a part-time
job
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 and in my opinion, it is a great decision. University
students
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 can be divided into undergraduate and graduate level and a part-time
job
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 is not the same for them. Bachelor degree usually takes four years to be graduated, and it is an appropriate time for
students
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 to start their journey in a real-world market,
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, it is almost impossible for them, especially before junior level to find a related
job
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 because of limited knowledge, but they can find out how it works and expand their work network. Usually, salaries of part-time jobs are less than 9 to 5 jobs four an hour, so they should learn how to spend it and not splurge.
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, One of my friends started to work in a food industrial company as a marketer, but just after graduating in the food industry, the company hire him for a related
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 position. Graduated
students
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 have another story, they often have a full-time
job
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 and they decide to study for
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 promotion unless they go to distant cities or another country for education. University most of the time offers a TA or research assistant
job
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 to them with a salary, but in special majors, they choose to find a
job
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 in other companies to get to know other organizations and build relationships with them.
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, an import-export technician can make a good connection between to companies that he worked for them. In conclusion, despite salary and monetary, a part-time
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 opening gate for
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 to vast their connections,
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