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Many people think technological devices such as smart phones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, we can not imagine a life without electronic devices which has made our days much easier. The question is how many benefits do we get from modern technology and are there any concerns about
such
 a topic. In my opinion, since mobile phones, phones and tablets have come to the market people quickly have got a huge interest in them.
Moreover
, now it is nearly impossible to meet no one person on the street without having a phone in his pocket. On the one side, with new technology, we have got a lot of advantages.
For example
, we are able to ring any of our friends, colleagues or
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family member at any time and receive any information from them. It is especially crucial for those who live abroad and can not visit family often, so they use different apps to keep in touch with important people via mobile phone. Even more, using cameras and microphones make communication like a live talk which gives the impression of a real meeting. The other great thing with technological devices is that parents can get a child when he is away from home,
for instance
 on the way to or from school to be sure about safety.
Therefore
, children use electronic devices hugely as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • communication
  • access to information
  • efficiency
  • addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • distraction
  • isolation
  • screen time
  • digital divide
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