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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any lifetime experiences. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Everybody knows that
people
 burn, grow and die. We can say
this
 is the experience between born to die.
People
 begin to learn from when they are born till die. We have some skills , given to us through genetics like our characteristics. Our genetics influences our characteristic.
However
,
that is
 not all influence and development of our life. We can explain
this
 for a few reasons. On the one hand, our genetic's
character
 influences too much in our lives. Because
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 you can not stop it. it is coming from your site.
For example
, if your father is nervous maybe you will be nervous because you have your father's genetics. Much research shows us our family's genetic effect on our lifestyle.
On the other hand
,
people
 are born and growing. İt is that they have some genetic skills from the family but when they grow and get experiences they begin to
change
 because they earn new abilities.
For instance
, many
people
 have a nervous
character
 when they are born.
Therefore
 the family's
character
 is nervous.
However
, they
change
 their lives when they get experience. İt is show us we can
change
 our genetic's
character
while
 in life.
To sum up
,
this
 is dependent on everybody. Some
people
 can
change
 their characters and not let it influence their life, others aren't. İn my opinion,
people
 should make their
character
 if we let manage the family's
character
, it means,
this
 is not us
this
 is our family grandmom, grandad, our mother and
further
.
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