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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any lifetime experiences. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Everybody knows that
people
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 burn, grow and die. We can say
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 is the experience between born to die.
People
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 begin to learn from when they are born till die. We have some skills , given to us through genetics like our characteristics. Our genetics influences our characteristic.
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,
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 not all influence and development of our life. We can explain
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 for a few reasons. On the one hand, our genetic's
character
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 influences too much in our lives. Because
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 you can not stop it. it is coming from your site.
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, if your father is nervous maybe you will be nervous because you have your father's genetics. Much research shows us our family's genetic effect on our lifestyle.
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,
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 are born and growing. İt is that they have some genetic skills from the family but when they grow and get experiences they begin to
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 because they earn new abilities.
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, many
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 have a nervous
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 when they are born.
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 the family's
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 is nervous.
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, they
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 their lives when they get experience. İt is show us we can
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 our genetic's
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while
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 in life.
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,
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 is dependent on everybody. Some
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 can
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 their characters and not let it influence their life, others aren't. İn my opinion,
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 should make their
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 if we let manage the family's
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, it means,
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 is not us
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 is our family grandmom, grandad, our mother and
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