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Some students prefer to take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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An abundant trend has been observed that most people like to take a break after school for either work or any leisure activity. There are many disadvantages to
this
 approach but the advantages are much more in comparison to it. Mostly, people want to get work exposure before their universities to know the practical exposure of the field they are interested in. The school-age students are very immature,
therefore
, they think in multi-direction, leading towards a lack of decision-making in career selection.
Apart from
this
, another reason is the financial stability. University fees are very high in monetary terms, through working students can bear their own expenses. Some students don't have financial issues so they travel to relax their minds for the tough
studies
. The university teaches through different approaches so
this
 helps them to be relaxed.
Although
 there are many advantages
this
 break can
also
 affect learners in a negative way. Getting practical knowledge is possible with
studies
, but it is not necessary to leave the
studies
 for it,
this
 might can
loss
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 of the temperament for studying. Academic
studies
 require learning which will not be possible for a person who has left the
studies
 for
this
 long. In the modern world, the employer sees it as a negative point and thinks that person was unable to complete graduation in the required amount of time, leading to very less jobs for an ambitious mind. In conclusion, employment before universities can provide a sense of career selection and financial assistance. Some can deal with the study pressures by travelling, enabling them to be mentally prepared for future
studies
.
On the contrary
, employment and
studies
 can be done parallelly so taking a year off is not a reasonable thing and employers can
also
 perceive it as a negative thing.
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