Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Everyone wants to become rich and a celebrity. In order to achieve it, we have to pay the price. In
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we will discuss what is the benefits and problems of the celebrity. Famous is the admiration, appreciation
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someone who is so
talanted
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talented
such
as
film
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a film
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stars
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or
sportmen
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sportsmen
...
ect
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etc
. They
heve
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have
everything
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normal
people
wanted:
the
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fame, money... and they live in
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very good condition. They will have more
opportunity
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than the other
people
.
Therefore
, they can send their children to private
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and build a stable future for their kids. They will have a
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to meet the influencer _to make
friend
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friends
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and do business together.
Although
they work quite hard, they may earn money more easily than
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other
people
.
On the other hand
, they will not have privacy or private in their life. Everything they do will get caught by the TV reporter , newspaper and so on. They have to be careful what they do or what they say. One of the famous
actress
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in China,
she
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lost
the
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career just bad speech or a famous singer in Vietnam lost his job because he get
involed
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involved
a sexual abuse.
That is
why they have to be a good model not only
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skill
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skills
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but
also
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. As
a
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famous
people
, we have to improve our skills in order to achieve the goal. We can not
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just
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keep it like that, we have to learn and work hard to improve our skills.
To conclude
, everything always has two sides.
That is
why we need to ensure the good things we have and try to improve ourselves. Famous is the kight with 2 shapes, but
advantage
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the advantage
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is more than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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