Some people believe that rich countries should provide poorer countries with help that is not financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whenever a poor nation is hit by
calamity
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a calamity
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, the
government
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and various
organizations
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organisations
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all over the world support it.
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, critics think that the well-off nation should distribute gifts in kind
instead
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of monetary endowment. I agree with
this
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although
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, although
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there are a few
acceptions
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exceptions
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two
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. Two
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reasons in favour of the idea and an exemption is explained below
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along
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with
a
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an
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conclusion
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exception
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.
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, poor nations usually have corrupt governments which do not spend national
funds
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as well as
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monetary allocation from
ally
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allied
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countries for the welfare of their subject.
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of
this
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capitalistic
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, capitalistic
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grants do not reach the targeted area.
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why people urge
ally
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allied
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countries and charity
organizations
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organisations
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to provide basic necessities to beneficiaries.
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, various local newspapers reported that flood-hit areas in Pakistan did not receive all the relief
funds
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allocated by
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the Uno
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Uno
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UNO
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in 2022. All in all,
instead
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of giving financial support to
suffers
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sufferers
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it
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, it
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is better to provide basic commodities.
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, dependent nations have
Medicare
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a Medicare
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infrastructure and weak local body systems unable to fulfil the needs of people. As elected mayors do not get enough
funds
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from the federal
government
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, which is why they are unable to develop efficient infrastructure in their town,
for example
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, roads, railways, transportation, sewer, etc.
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, fellow citizens and charity
organizations
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organisations
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prefer to supply relief products like food
medicines
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, medicines
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tents.
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, almost all of my friends and family members
denoted
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donated
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aid
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items and fiscal
funds
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to a local charity
instead
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of
provisional
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the provisional
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and central
government
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fundraising camps. In a nutshell, people do not have trust in their
government
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and infrastructure
which
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is why they are more likely to help their fellow nationals personally
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of relying on local bodies. It can be concluded that relief
aid
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is inevitable
but
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financial
aid
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cannot be ignored when needed. As
distribution
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the distribution
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of
aid
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supplies decreases the chance of
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fraud
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fraudulence
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fraudulence,
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it is better than fiscal support. Nations across the globe should join hands to help deprived countries
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in either
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either
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any
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way.

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You provided a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for the task.
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You presented reasons to support your view, which is necessary for a good argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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