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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellenct option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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There are quite a few lodging options that help learners to access
school
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 facilities easily. A portion of the population believes that
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 spaces at schools are the best alternative
of
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 going home.
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,
this
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 issue is not entirely
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straightforward
, and arguments can be made against
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 idea.
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 essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding view. On the one hand, parents feel anxious about balancing daily living activities and their
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 studies and form unhealthy routines. These range from their food to household chores, meaning that they may not be able to prepare their own food and starve themselves, or even resort to unhealthy eating habits
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 tiring classes.
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, most
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students
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 often go to convenience stores to buy instant options
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 their meals, to save time. Another argument is the emotional support that
students
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 receive from their mother and father, meaning they feel more secure and
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 more comfortable.
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, opponents of
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 view point out that out that apartments near the
school
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 is the greatest choice because it encourage independence and
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a sense
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 of
reponsibility
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responsibility
 to oneself. Examples can be seen in
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 countries, where they advise
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youngsters to live on their own despite the busy schedule in their universities.
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, fast food companies accept
students
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 for employment,
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 they can earn and pay for their own bills and fees at
school
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.
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,
this
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 type of
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 will improve
their
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 multitasking abilities
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 will help them in the future.
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, being away from home may form detrimental patterns in terms of their nutrition.
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, It is logical
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 that staying in a boarding
school
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 is indeed
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beneficial
 on pupil's
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 in the long run. It would
apper
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appear
 that
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 serves as a good option for
students
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 who would like to live with freedom.
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